Sunday, November 25, 2007

Monday Poetry Train

Not much of an effort but at least I showed up. I think I'm still recovering from the blogaversary.

The Essence of You

Your sigh is enough
To calm my heart
To lift my soul
… the essence of you.

I’ll take you with me
A touch on my fingers
A promise on my lips
… the essence of you.

Wrapped safe and warm
I’ll wander my day
Ponder my night
In the essence of you


Jill said...

This make me think of the feeling that the perfume of someone you love when you are away from him/her.

Rhian said...

I really like this one ALOT RJ.
and you did a damn fine job on the Blogoversary. Thank you.

Ann said...

I like this a lot as well. Beautiful poem.

julia said...

'I’ll take you with me
A touch on my fingers
A promise on my lips
… the essence of you.'

That's marvellous!

Y said...

wow, very nicely done.

"A touch on my fingers
A promise on my lips"

loved these lines. i could feel them...ya know?

Lakota Princess said...

You wrote this for me didn't you? I knew you were only ignoring me because you really liked me. I grow on ya after awhile. Admit it.

Roscoe James said...

Yeah, I agree. That middle verse has nice imagery. I still don't like the rest of it. It feels stilted. Doesn't move well. But thanks to everyone.

gautami tripathy said...

I loved that middle stanza...

Lakota Princess said...

ADMIT IT DAMMIT! I was even nice (don't gasp in shock) and resisted the impulse to post a snarky comment on your newest video. See, I can play nice. Okay, not really. Just for you I'm going to post my holiday poem on the train. I'm into sharing today.

Missy said...

Love the sentiment! It's been so long since I felt that way it was a shock to my system to read it.

Batbitch said...

We gotta be nice to him LP? I don't do nice. I'm outta here.

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

That's gorgeous, Roscoe. Wow.

Michelle Johnson said...

Your poem is nice but, I especially like the middle stanza. Thanks for sharing.